Girls? I wrote her a song to show her im sorry? Please rate it?

Im 15, and so is my girlfriend. I love her more than anything, but i didnt realize it until too late. Anyway, im bi, but i didnt tell her, and i ended up getting carried away and cheating on her with a guy. I felt bad, so i decided to tell her and say im sorry and it didnt mean anything to me. She didnt really say if she wanted to break up, and i havent heard from her in 3 days. SO i wrote her this a song, and i going to give it to her as well as some roses later.





I would like to know if you think its any good? Here it is:





';I dont ask forgiveness


I know its not deserved


Im fighting to believe that i am ready


i cant hope to fix this


in actions or in words


and surely you'll be better off without me


and i...


without you I am nothing


living in a nothing place


with just your face on my mind....


Ive realized my greatest fear


my actions bleed your diamond tears


the echo of your absence screams through me


i try to disconnect


and now im looking back


i guess i knew i never would be ready


and i....


without you i am nothing


living in a nothing place


with just your face on my mind


youre the greatest thing that ever happend to me


and i pushed you away


now i believe theres nothing left to be


and i...


without you i am nothing


living in a nothing place


with just your face on my mind.... so beautiful';





How is it?Girls? I wrote her a song to show her im sorry? Please rate it?
i like it lol


if i was ur girl i would love it lots lol


it just depends if she likes the words but to me they


make lots of sense and i think its kinda emoish becuz i listen to like


that type of music and screamo and stuff and the lyrics sound like that


its good r u sure u didnt get it from a song???


lolGirls? I wrote her a song to show her im sorry? Please rate it?
dude grow up she obviously doesnt want a song sung to her what is this some kind of disney movie where a song will make her fall instantaneously in love with you if thats the case then memorize the song YOUR EVERYTHING BY KEITH URBAN and she will definetly fall in love with you but if you have a very bad singing voice then it doesnt matter how the lyrics are composed she will just be repulsed by you
It is very nice but be prepared, a pretty song will not make her automatically trust you again, it will clear the air and let her see that you are sorry and confused and regret what happened but don't forget you will probably need to make it up to her more than that, good luck =)
That is very sweet and a beautiful song, the lyrics have deep meaning to them. We need more songs like this on the radio - not some ';PUH PUH PUH POKUH FACE'; crap. I say bravo~ she'll love it! If she doesn't she's probably not telling the truth. ;) And roses are great, too. Good luck!
I think it's wonderful, but there should be meaning + don't be like that with another guy, it's just wrong. Just tell her the truth and tell her (with meaning) that you are sorry and promise to never do anything like that again as a mess up.
it's kind of nice,, I loved the 1st part of it but you might wanna work on the line '; living in a nothing place'; cause it kind of made no sense to me,,, other than that I hope she likes it :)
It's amazing.


7 outta 10.


But that's just sick. Cheating on your girlfriend with a GUY?! Ick. I could understand if she breaks up with you.... :(
Beautifula and touching





so deep. i m sure she will love it


im spleechless right now





your song is like a great poem. i havent read pieces like these in a long while
Great song :)





Just a bit dramatic ;) haha.
You have talent. It's a very good song. :)
its a great song especially for a girl! she is gonna freak good luck im sure she'll be yours :)
I think that's really good but get her chocolate also XD and idk what you did was pretty bad it just depends on how forgivable she is but good luck i guess just try not to hurt her again :]
Ohhh my goodness! I loved it! I hope one day a boy will do that for me. She has to take you back if you give this and roses to her. I wish you luck! :)
Pathetic
i think its beautiful but you can replace some words
That is so beautiful !!!
beautiful! she will love it!
Wow. That's great. She'll think that's so sweet. Good Luck
ooh sweetie its more than beautiful! if she dosnt forgive u after hearing this then shes not worth it. its really just too sweet to ignore. shows how much u really love her :) 10/10
Your going to be famous! :P
Lame
its sweet ;)
omg a bi dude!
its so great!
Awww so sweet. She'll love it


I wish you two the best of luck :)
NICE, i'm sure she'll love it. epecially if u wrote it ur self.
One word dude: cliche'd.